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Mickey Crow's avatar

Great story, Jimmy. It felt like you were revealing little morsels until the shock moment became not predictable but sort of an expected tie it up

Jimmy Doom's avatar

I was spooning it out a little on purpose. It was not the story I intended to write when I began. It sort of flowered as I was as working.

dissembling bling's avatar

Glad you posted the poem, it reminded me to come read this. "Some pretty good jokes" kills. "Father Thurman checked in" is a great way to produce a "what happened?" response. Kinda near perfect (for a short story, tchhh) I am always impressed.

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