This is what I love. A genuine voice. Any reader can identify with a genuine voice. I heard it. Loved the brevity of sentences. Stunning in a stripped back way.
It was a great read brother. Some crazy twists in a short story. I am still emotionally upset by the Dad whooping on his kid after being called out, as it bought on flashbacks to my youth. With that being said, the emotional connection was real AF.
That last line really hit me. That last line pulled this whole thing together and turned a few snippets from a man's life into something much bigger and heavier. Beautifully done.
This piece documents the lifelong lightning speed connections between images and memories of youth to adulthood. Kids sports situations are filled with good stories. This is a great one.
Thank you. My friends and I joke about drunks and coke heads ( often our former selves) rambling about Little League, but that really illustrates how strong the memories are.
This is what I love. A genuine voice. Any reader can identify with a genuine voice. I heard it. Loved the brevity of sentences. Stunning in a stripped back way.
Wow. Thanks. Authenticity is always the goal.
A short powerful piece. Good details with a solid voice. Gave me chills.
Thanks. I love chills, both giving and receiving.
That last sentence. I have chills.
Thanks. I did too.
Malaise... Outstanding use my friend. This hits home on all aspects. Well done!
Thanks. It showed up in my head so strongly I set aside another story to get it out there. Glad I did.
It was a great read brother. Some crazy twists in a short story. I am still emotionally upset by the Dad whooping on his kid after being called out, as it bought on flashbacks to my youth. With that being said, the emotional connection was real AF.
I’ve got another story almost done. I think it will be a Grand Prix track compared to this one.
Man I LOVE this character, want him in my life. Thanks for introducing us. We’ll be hanging out quite a bit now that he’s lodged into my mind.
Thanks Lou! I like him too
Damn, Doom.
That sounds good. Not a wow, a damn.
That last line really hit me. That last line pulled this whole thing together and turned a few snippets from a man's life into something much bigger and heavier. Beautifully done.
Thank you. Thanks for sticking around until the end of it.
Fuck yes, brother.
Fuck yes is tied with Wow for my favorite short comments.
Wow
Hahahahahahaha
Oooh!! I got goosebumps at the end! He was safe! Ugh
Thanks. That part was not predetermined. I got goosebumps too.
This piece documents the lifelong lightning speed connections between images and memories of youth to adulthood. Kids sports situations are filled with good stories. This is a great one.
Thank you. My friends and I joke about drunks and coke heads ( often our former selves) rambling about Little League, but that really illustrates how strong the memories are.
No one introduces those we see as real life human beings like you do,J.