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Patty Mallett's avatar

That’s a wow.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. The story really grew as I was writing

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Joe's avatar

Brilliant story.

All the emotions.

Wow.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I was trail walking at dusk at a conference in Northern Michigan and this one poured out of me

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Beevil's avatar

I couldn’t figure out where the heck Maria came from but I was really glad she showed up

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

People just walking a trail

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Patris's avatar

All of these comments, yet. I was holding off until I could breathe again -and because I couldn’t stop thinking ‘Holy shit’.

What a freaking beauty this story is - brutal but as real as beauty is, J.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I wanted to write a really good one to do justice to the memory of the place I was. Even though it’s dark I think the story succeeded

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Patris's avatar

Boy did it succeed. No question.

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Paul R's avatar

I remember how I felt reading “To kill a mockingbird”. I was 13 or 14 years old and I knew that something bad was going to happen. And it did.

I had that same sense of imminent danger reading your story, Jimmy. Then a sadness about the loss of innocence. Nicely crafted, and your economic style means the reader is transported on an emotional journey in a couple of minutes.

Loved it, and well done on the story and the photograph, Jimmy.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

That comparison is a beautiful compliment. Thanks Paul

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PJ Ryder's avatar

Another great start to a much longer story or tv series. 👍🏻

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Joseph Young's avatar

Awesome, Jimmy. A breath catcher. I hope the dumb kids figure out Ganjy helped with all that, haha.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. I’m glad I guessed correctly that this one was worth sharing

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Joseph Young's avatar

For sure. I dig the subtle class thing going on too.

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Patris's avatar

The tension built though i remembered the outcome.. that’s how good this is.

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