Interesting. I feel theres possibly too many descriptive names floating about. It makes it a little difficult to follow. On saying that, I do love the names and think they're very clever but in this instance it interrupts the flow.
I would love to comment on this story, Jimmy, but where would I begin? You have put my brains through an Osterizer set on pulverize. I can't help wondering, though, am I too damn old to begin working toward earning a Smutter?
“But now we’re only making like.” That’s so funny.
I tried looking up Oink because the idea of everyone having to sacrifice one eye to save the planet was pretty interesting, but I don’t think I found it so I’m not sure it actually exists. If it doesn’t exist, you should definitely write a story based on that premise.
I sense you are channeling some "New Detroiters living in exile in Hamtramck" vibes...by which I mean rage.
Interesting. I feel theres possibly too many descriptive names floating about. It makes it a little difficult to follow. On saying that, I do love the names and think they're very clever but in this instance it interrupts the flow.
I would love to comment on this story, Jimmy, but where would I begin? You have put my brains through an Osterizer set on pulverize. I can't help wondering, though, am I too damn old to begin working toward earning a Smutter?
This feels like a scene from Portlandia
Between the similes and the thesaurus, the cleaving just got cleaved.
After reading this one, I feel like Statler and Waldorf.
Crazy man!
“But now we’re only making like.” That’s so funny.
I tried looking up Oink because the idea of everyone having to sacrifice one eye to save the planet was pretty interesting, but I don’t think I found it so I’m not sure it actually exists. If it doesn’t exist, you should definitely write a story based on that premise.
Enjoyed the read! And at least the glitter was biodegradable.