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Adam's avatar

Beautiful.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. It was really vivid in my head. More than usual.

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Molly Graham's avatar

I love this one. I want to be that young lady.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

You have granddaughters just as smart

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V Moire's avatar

I want all girls who go to, wherever they go now instead of Ladywood, to have a similar experience.

I'm also 100% sure my girls have done something similar. And, 100% sure my youngest could take those fellas at their own game. Very well done.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I'm really happy that mothers of daughters like it.

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Patrick K.'s avatar

Wonderful lesson in there. And, by the way, “As Waite took a step forward the man scurried off like someone who had heard a stove timer.” Is brilliant.

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Jim Latham's avatar

It was...I also liked "Father Jerry shook his head no, and beyond the shake Waite Elliot saw the collar of his daughter’s cashmere coat."

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. I cross-posted one of yours. Don't know if they notified you.

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Jim Latham's avatar

they did. i dropped an email to say thanks, or at least i think i did. seems like there's a zillion new features recently.

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Jim Latham's avatar

i don't know how to cross-post....and i'm not downloading the app. i have enough tech companies tracking me already. {Edit: apparently it's only available for free posts. makes sense. that's why the option doesn't pop up for me on this one}

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. I love thinking of lines like that. I can see the action and it's fun to capture it.

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Patty Mallett's avatar

Fun story. Good lesson. Well done.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Jef is full of good lessons in his work. I'm just wakeboarding behind him. 😎

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Joe's avatar

Some interesting lessons for life in this one.

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Mark L's avatar

Oye!

That's a screenplay right there! Keep Going Jimmy!

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I doubt I'm going to continue much longer

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Mark L's avatar

Do what's best for you Jimmy

All the best, lots of love Brother

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I really thought publishing every day would be best for me. I really believed this platform had a lot of potential. Some of the bad stuff in my life ( recuperating from both strikes among them ) isn't Substack's fault, but all the energy I've put into growing this thing has resulted in a flat line . I still believe 1000 people in this universe would gladly pay for it, but no one knows about it

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Carol Angel's avatar

That old saying,”Can’t judge a Book By its Cover.” Great values at an early age or not enough age to warp the thought processes. Enjoyed

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks Carol. Go ahead and share it with your friends

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