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Patris's avatar

Corey stumbled into hell that night, didn’t he? Time warp that detoxification brings.

The next morning will be better though. Please.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

More like a maze of sensory input than a straight fiery hell.

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Patris's avatar

Must be the carnival setting. I’m still recovering from a trip to Sesame Place 5 years ago. This story was déjà-vu practically

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I love carnivals. Ooops. Now I gotta send you a link to one of my movies , set in Detroit's greatest and never forgotten underground carnival.

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Patris's avatar

Yes!

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Joe's avatar

Great short.

You really know how to take a hit.

Well done!

A little knowledge, indeed.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks J/S. Timing those takes some practice. Always fun though

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Patris's avatar

powerful stuff

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I really thought I brought enough to it that I could make a living off it. On that note, I’m going on an airport run.

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Patris's avatar

You realize this only adds to your bonafides…

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Joe's avatar

Crazy story but you gotta do what you gotta do to do what you promise to do!

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Especially to yourself

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Adam's avatar

I’ve smelled like loss myself. I hope Corey gets there.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I've smelled like a bunch of intangible stuff.

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Jim Ruland's avatar

Oh hell no he’s riding the unicorn tonight!

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I think, my friend, you just ordered a Rashomon of this.story.

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EJ Trask's avatar

I love the momentum this story has. And it’s terribly unsettling, which I also love.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thank you. That's a massive compliment because unsettled is exactly how I felt writing it.

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Margaret Warren's avatar

Agree!!

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Margaret Warren's avatar

Your protagonists do love to ride the ragged edge of disaster!!

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Yeah, they often operate on the fringes of both society and sanity

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Carol Angel's avatar

Screaming children and a Merry-Go-Round what a combination! Then add a recovering support team, I hope he got to ride the unicorn.❤️

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks Carol!

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K.C. Knouse's avatar

The best part for me was the ever-changing impression Corey had of the beer tent. You are a clever writer, indeed. I confess: I had to read it twice to fully comprehend it. Maybe I need a meeting---or a drink.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

You know which one I recommend

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