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Patris's avatar

Lightning crashes right here. Heart in my throat from the beginning.

Wow

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Ben Woestenburg's avatar

If I would've known what it was about, I would've skipped it. But I don't mind. It hit way too close to home, brought tears of memory, so yeah, it works.

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Patty Mallett's avatar

Is the fact that Lelli is good or bad?

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Leili is ... pregnant ? good or bad?

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I think that must be what you mean. Let me know. I have an answer

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Joe's avatar

What an ending.

Your genius shines again.

Great story, Jimmy!

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Jonah Town's avatar

The portrayal of Leili's desperate attempts to reach Maurice and the palpable relief when she finally hears his voice are incredibly powerful. Moreover, you skillfully weave in subtle details and interactions that add depth to the narrative, such as Fauna's quiet support and Maurice's concern about Fauna's pregnancy amidst the chaos. Great work!

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Kak Detroit's avatar

Very powerful Doom. I don't know if it's because I just woke up, but, the beginning of this made very anxious, and then when Leili found out everything was good, I shed tears of joy. Well done sir.

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