I agree I really like the shifting perspective between present and past. I also really like the line “...it was on his mind, like a loose bumper you promise yourself you’ll get fixed one day.”
That's a bit of a brain tango for a writer. Makes me happy that you liked it. I meant for people to see it as hopeful, though some readers told me that they thought it was dark
I love the present time sequences mingled with the trauma of the past. Cal is resilient. I like that.
I agree I really like the shifting perspective between present and past. I also really like the line “...it was on his mind, like a loose bumper you promise yourself you’ll get fixed one day.”
The more I think about it, the human mind is a constant dance of present, past and future. Stoked that you like it.
That's a bit of a brain tango for a writer. Makes me happy that you liked it. I meant for people to see it as hopeful, though some readers told me that they thought it was dark