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V Moire's avatar

Love this. It could be any city, but it’s not.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

It could have gone a few other places too, but it didn't. I kept my own impulses in check and let the characters take it.

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Patrick K.'s avatar

What a crazy way to wake up and try and gather your thoughts.

And despite the tragedy of the van, leaving us with a chuckle at the end.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I've woken up to noxious fumes. That was wild.

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Joe's avatar

Life is all about perspective, isn't it?

Makes me wonder what Scanlon's into.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

There's a hint or two. Morning dehydration is usually booze. I don't see Scanlan as being at the breaking point. Just a flawed guy whose boring morning routine was disrupted and through that he views his surroundings and his relationships.

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Joe's avatar

With the ribs, I was thinking more along the lines of fight club.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

That's interesting, but it didn't cross my mind. Just a 40ish out of shape heavy drinker who can do dumb shit like pull a muscle when he's panicking his morning water is about to spill.

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Ernie Brill's avatar

FINE. AND SOMEONE NEEDS TO WRITE THE DUDE A LETTER ABOUT LITTER. EMPTY AWFUL OFFAL MORE OFTEN OR FACE THE FATE OF THE WEIGHT.

SEE IF YOU CAN TRACK DOWN THE SWEETGRIT BOOK. MY DETROIT. BY DAN GEORGAKAS..

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Not adding any new books to my life until I move in a few weeks and sell a couple thousand copies of the one I wrote.

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Walter Horne's avatar

Such a simple story that perfectly illustrates the genius of your writing. You have a way of taking the reader into unfamiliar worlds by engaging us with detailed descriptions of familiar things, such as bumping a water glass, and your descriptions make those common events fascinating. It's like a literary version of the Stooges "Funhouse." You give us some Down in the Street before engrossing us in LA Blues.

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