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Patty Mallett's avatar

That’s a truly odd short story.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

That truly might be the start of a novel

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Scott Dermody's avatar

I hope it is. Great characters, it holds a vibe that seems both heavy and light at the same time.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. That’s what I was shooting for. Humor, toasted with dark reality

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Patris's avatar

That’s what I just thought

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Patris's avatar

stricken with the image of her face - like some Delphic reptilian oracle asking the question .

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Paul R's avatar

“…like the singer of a neo-Glam band who snuck some Jungian pop psych lyrics into a ketamine ballad.”

I can say with some confidence that these words have never appeared in the same sentence or in the same order in human history. I have always had a soft spot for Marc Bolan, whether in Tyrannosaurus Rex or T Rex. A quick Google revealed that Bolan DOES explore Jungian themes.

I won’t be able to listen to Ride a White Swan in the same way ever again. Well done, Jimmy, your imagination knows no boundaries.

PS Sorry about Spurs. I wanted them to win.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I thought about running to Magees at halftime but was afraid I’d jinx em. ( For the record Magees is a Liverpool supporters bar but is also the bar where I run the LOD dart night and know the owner. The new Spurs bar is in the burbs).

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E. Jean Carroll's avatar

Loved it!

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

I think this is the beginning of the new novel. Thanks, my friend.

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Joe's avatar

I have had this feeling for quite some time now, wondering why the world has become liar's club.

And now this story pops up.

Since we can't be 100% certain anymore about what's true about all the stuff people talk about, I guess (probably) granola-free peanut butter raisin popcorn should do the trick.

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Karlyn's avatar

Happy almost 5 year anniversary! Damn impressive. This story sounds like an opening into something more expansive. I can hear and see these characters evolving into a novel.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

That’s what I’m doing with it

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Samara's avatar

yes i've seen these tongues, yes often on trains or buses, no you cannot forget them: 'reptilian, grotesque and seemed thoughtful at the same time'

brilliant piece; pleasure to ride the bus with you

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. There are 1700+ stories in the archive. Hope you like a bunch of em.

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Samara's avatar

on it! I’m sure I shall

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David's avatar

Short, sweet, and a little dirty. Just how I like my granola bars. “Shot with rough luck” - loved that

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

This one might become a novel if life would get out of my way

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lou J's avatar

I didn’t expect to laugh like that. Not sure I was supposed to but it felt good and I’ll be heading off to sleep in a better mood.

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Alex Shifman's avatar

I will buy this novel immediately. Better get cracking.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

On it. Subtitled “Alex Shifman Made Me Write This”

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Alex Shifman's avatar

Water mark, my disapproving face.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

On every page? Or little transition avatars?

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Alex Shifman's avatar

On the spine at least, just under the title like an imprint logo

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

How about I just name a character Alex Shifman?

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Alex Shifman's avatar

So long as he’s somewhat pathetic.

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