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Paul R's avatar

As someone who should have paid more attention to what my step daughter was doing in her room. this one is hard to react to objectively. The child is entitled to her privacy and to maker her own way, but as a (proxy) parent you want to ensure that they are swimming between the flags.

FWIW, my step daughter is now lost to the World, spiralling into a vortex of drug abuse, poor mental health, self harm, anxiety and depression. Once a talented artist, she now administers ugly tattoos to herself and recasts her adolescence as if it was a living hell.

It was for me and her mother, and I wish that all she was doing was creating melancholy flip books on the demise of comic book heroes. I'm not Brett, and I hope Lisette uses her talent well...

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Patris's avatar

Knowing and loving a close friend of my son’s who was swept into that life I can’t express the deep sadness I feel for all of you, especially her. It’s a struggle she doesn’t particularly want to win.

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Paul R's avatar

Thank you.

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Patris's avatar

J - she drew his own image of himself. You wonder if it surprised him that she knew him that well..

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

That's a brilliant observation. I saw it as she was looking outward at the world that dismayed her. I really like yours better.

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Patty Mallett's avatar

Brilliant.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. I'm always trying

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Joe's avatar

Wow.

This was a radical departure from anything you've written.

You gave us a paranoid step father who went from "I know" to embarrassed "how will I apologize and will she ever forgive me" in a few paragraphs.

Proving once again, you are a Master Story Teller.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Always trying to keep them fresh. Thanks J/S

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Michael Serrur's avatar

Quite the flourish at the end, there. I don't have any children, but being a young man not too long ago, I recognize how difficult it must be to determine the line between privacy and parenting. I guess all we can do it give the people we love care, kindness, and support.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

People sometimes fumbe the kindness part

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Gerard DiLeo's avatar

Great twist at the end. Very clever. Enjoyed it.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. I love to twist em when I can

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Luke's avatar

Wow, Jimmy. Incredible dive into a moment of the complexities of a real life moment.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks Luke. I love the tight focus and the power dive. I really feel them when I'm writing.

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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

Damn dude. Killer.

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Jimmy Doom's avatar

Thanks. No idea what it will take to get the attention of the now massive Substack Notes community. but I know I'm doing some writing that merits a few more eyeballs

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Sean Thomas McDonnell's avatar

It's all just commenting, liking, sharing other folks stuff (that you like). If you don't do that, it'll be hard for people to discover you. Also, a lot of folks read what they see on the site, so even if they subscribe, they might not see your story. I halted my emails because it was too overwhelming. I usually just pick out a few things each day and read them. Everyone is different though.

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