This was really heartfelt. Someone maintaining a sense of normalcy when online ordering prevails, the pizzeria barely see anyone else, and gas being so high. She comes in and plays ping-pong.
I really liked this one, Jimmy! I love that he recognized she was after something he couldn't quite put his finger on, but instead of pressing, or challenging, or trying to coax it out of her, he just let her play. The two of them needed her to be there for different reasons, and Cliff was happy with that.
I liked it. Feels like a great beginning of something longer - even a one-location story or play. It leaves us wanting to know more about Miranda, Cliff and maybe even those places the drivers go. One thing - I’m not sure this paragraph is clear: Cliff, an only child adopted by a family of Welsh descent who looked like a video game plumber who might own a pizzeria like the one Cliff did, knew one thing:
You have singular on plumber. Yes family is a singular word but doesn’t quite work. More like: …who looked like a bunch of video game plumbers…
Technology is both a blessing and a curse when it comes to convenience. I don’t believe there will ever be a time where people stop going into stores 100%, but I believe there will be more stores like Pepperoni Jabroni’s, empty the majority of the time with a handful of people actually entering the stores throughout the day.
As for Cliff, that was very sweet of him to consider doing for Miranda. Maybe her pride might be a bit bruised if she ever found out, but we can all use a break sometimes.
Ding ding ding! Another ringer! The funny thing to me is pinball doesn't SEEM subtle. Not on the surface. Then again punk rock and horror films often don't SEEM subtle either. There's A LOT of depth under what seem like loud surfaces. You are a multilayered multifaceted cat. I hope to stop into Small's Bar and meet you in person someday. The IRONY is neither punk rock or horror movies are really my thing but I LOVE IRONY. Also I sort of take that back about horror films. Nobody watches MOST of the Walking Dead if they hate horror films. I DO sort of dig the Zombie genre.
This was really heartfelt. Someone maintaining a sense of normalcy when online ordering prevails, the pizzeria barely see anyone else, and gas being so high. She comes in and plays ping-pong.
I always sucked at pinball.
I really liked this one, Jimmy! I love that he recognized she was after something he couldn't quite put his finger on, but instead of pressing, or challenging, or trying to coax it out of her, he just let her play. The two of them needed her to be there for different reasons, and Cliff was happy with that.
I liked it. Feels like a great beginning of something longer - even a one-location story or play. It leaves us wanting to know more about Miranda, Cliff and maybe even those places the drivers go. One thing - I’m not sure this paragraph is clear: Cliff, an only child adopted by a family of Welsh descent who looked like a video game plumber who might own a pizzeria like the one Cliff did, knew one thing:
You have singular on plumber. Yes family is a singular word but doesn’t quite work. More like: …who looked like a bunch of video game plumbers…
By the way - what’s a video game plumber?
Great story!
Good detail.
Had me really interested.
Was never any good at pinball, rarely played. More enjoyed watching others.
Did you know if you help a butterfly break out of its chrysalis it will never be perfect?
Technology is both a blessing and a curse when it comes to convenience. I don’t believe there will ever be a time where people stop going into stores 100%, but I believe there will be more stores like Pepperoni Jabroni’s, empty the majority of the time with a handful of people actually entering the stores throughout the day.
As for Cliff, that was very sweet of him to consider doing for Miranda. Maybe her pride might be a bit bruised if she ever found out, but we can all use a break sometimes.
tilt is an apt title for this one Jimmy, lovely pacing and exchanges here.
Ding ding ding! Another ringer! The funny thing to me is pinball doesn't SEEM subtle. Not on the surface. Then again punk rock and horror films often don't SEEM subtle either. There's A LOT of depth under what seem like loud surfaces. You are a multilayered multifaceted cat. I hope to stop into Small's Bar and meet you in person someday. The IRONY is neither punk rock or horror movies are really my thing but I LOVE IRONY. Also I sort of take that back about horror films. Nobody watches MOST of the Walking Dead if they hate horror films. I DO sort of dig the Zombie genre.
Took me back to the early 80s, hanging out at the pizza shop/party store, where we had a slice and played pinball, and or Pack Man, Galaga, Astroid.