Well you put me through a bit of a rollercoaster for this one. A few lines made me laugh (“…because Friday was when his mom ruined meatloaf”, “…Danny Killarney always joked it was because Angie was so hot Jesus would climb down off the cross”), then I got sad when Derkie said “I didn't know I was supposed to write you poetry”. But when he went to the creek and thought about writing poetry I felt secondhand hope on his behalf. Then the story ended and I felt sad again.
Oh how I love your stories when I can see the characters and feel for them like I did for this one. For me Outstanding!
I try hard to change perspectives and settings so that people will meet characters they're philosophically closer to.
After I finished reading this one, I realized this is the first time I can remember you've written a sweet story from a guy's perspective.
Awww.
Your talent continues to expand.
Nice job!
There must be others, but I'm glad you like this one.
I bet that kid from Dutch Hills can't write poetry like Derkie. Carry on son and remember not to lean against the ladder. You'll be fine.
Derkie is a star for wanting to do it so bad he used a rock.
You captured it, Jimmy. And I love that poem!
I should write more Derkie poems
Well you put me through a bit of a rollercoaster for this one. A few lines made me laugh (“…because Friday was when his mom ruined meatloaf”, “…Danny Killarney always joked it was because Angie was so hot Jesus would climb down off the cross”), then I got sad when Derkie said “I didn't know I was supposed to write you poetry”. But when he went to the creek and thought about writing poetry I felt secondhand hope on his behalf. Then the story ended and I felt sad again.
This was a very good story! I liked it a lot.
Please try to convince other people that it's money well spent. I'm really struggling to make it worth my while as my other sources of income dry up.