A. he transformed the guards into a statue (they softened, etc.), or
B. It’s a final illusion/distraction to escape without being followed, and make the king think the jester state was the illusion instead of the books on the window?
The think I love about fantasy is that I can make shit up completely. I don't have to say " no junkie would do that, no party store owner would say that ..." I can invent anything I want. Flower petals enchanted to hold words on a page is one of those things.
Hey Jimmy, it's great to see you writing fantasy. I'm curious why you don't do more of it? You mentioned you had a fantasy novel in progress. I hope you get a chance to finish it!
If I can make one small suggestion. I don't think you need the guards at the beginning. They're a fun addition, but it would have given you a chance to play out the scene further between the princess and wizard, explore their relationship a bit. Now if this were a novel it would make sense to keep it... since you know, you've got like 500 more pages left to explore that. 😁
I'm looking forward to hearing more about this duo and their adventures, or any fantasy adventures you're going to send our way.
King banishes Wizards from his realm and then lets his daughter's favorite wizard in her quarters without bodyguards or some sort of supervision? Not plausible. Plus the bodyguards establish that the realm/ kingdom probably isn't sedate, plus it gave me an opportunity for them to converse in an alternate language, establishing that the princess was intelligent enough to learn multiple languages. The bodyguards had to be there.
I imagined it as Chapter 2 or even Chapter 3, or, thinking further, Book 2 or Book 3.
But then, I am quite an orderly person and not generally taken by fantasy, so, why not have this as Book I, Chapter 1 and then make the reader wonder via the prophesies until a subsequent Book.
Did he turn her into a statue? Did he replace her with a statue?
Read it again. She giggled, so she's not a statue.
Either:
A. he transformed the guards into a statue (they softened, etc.), or
B. It’s a final illusion/distraction to escape without being followed, and make the king think the jester state was the illusion instead of the books on the window?
I'd like to wait until more people read it but one of those is absolutely correct.
It’s terrific. caught me already. It flows and from the first sentences I’ve wanted to know where this goes.
Are you going to let us follow?
Maybe a summer read? Weekly? I would love daily, if you would
I couldn't do daily. Maybe weekly or once every two
I’ll take however you choose to present it. Naturally hoping it’s written already and you’re portioning it out.
I came up with that tonight. Thought about it for ten minutes or less and started typing
What!!?
The flowers into pages struck me as something I’ve never come across in fantasy. Wow
The think I love about fantasy is that I can make shit up completely. I don't have to say " no junkie would do that, no party store owner would say that ..." I can invent anything I want. Flower petals enchanted to hold words on a page is one of those things.
It must be kind of like realizing you can fly - and instinctively knowing how to land. Amazing.
(The flower petals to pages of words unfolding is a great metaphor) .
Hey Jimmy, it's great to see you writing fantasy. I'm curious why you don't do more of it? You mentioned you had a fantasy novel in progress. I hope you get a chance to finish it!
If I can make one small suggestion. I don't think you need the guards at the beginning. They're a fun addition, but it would have given you a chance to play out the scene further between the princess and wizard, explore their relationship a bit. Now if this were a novel it would make sense to keep it... since you know, you've got like 500 more pages left to explore that. 😁
I'm looking forward to hearing more about this duo and their adventures, or any fantasy adventures you're going to send our way.
King banishes Wizards from his realm and then lets his daughter's favorite wizard in her quarters without bodyguards or some sort of supervision? Not plausible. Plus the bodyguards establish that the realm/ kingdom probably isn't sedate, plus it gave me an opportunity for them to converse in an alternate language, establishing that the princess was intelligent enough to learn multiple languages. The bodyguards had to be there.
You never know what a wizard might do. A fine tale that seems set to continue through the princess’ lifetime.
It just might. That might be the prologue
A prologue, perhaps.
Definitely a teaser.
I imagined it as Chapter 2 or even Chapter 3, or, thinking further, Book 2 or Book 3.
But then, I am quite an orderly person and not generally taken by fantasy, so, why not have this as Book I, Chapter 1 and then make the reader wonder via the prophesies until a subsequent Book.
The permutations are endless.
Fun times!
I am pleased it made you happy.
I enjoyed reading it and imagining.
🖤
I was fascinated.
That makes me happy. I love writing in the fantasy genre
Nice change of pace! Hope she wins.
Thanks. Writing fantasy is a ton of fun. I love removing restraints
Love it.
I'm glad. Not everyone appreciates the genre